Star Trek: Deep Space Nine "Past Tense, Pt. 1"

Reblog to have something lgbt happen to you this summer

‘im a girl’ ’im a boy’ okay well ive got boulders on my shoulders collarbones begin to crack there is very little left of me and it’s never coming back

insp.

The Untamed - No Children

I'm not usually one to post here, but I tried my hand at editing & you're all very welcome to watch me lose my mind about these dudes for 2.28 minutes

rest in peace Jason Todd, you would've loved me

I made Hungarian mushroom soup and it's a little too delicious to be real

No cuz if my best friend had been acting weird and lying and had a history of possessed murders, had stabbed me while possessed, and was angry all the time recently, refusing to tell me what’s wrong.

And I was going through the horrors and then someone told me * very convincingly* that my best friend had murdered someone and then upon confronting my best friend he didn’t deny or explain it and then angrily approached me with the alleged murder weapon in his hand…

Ya I would flinch too.

Scott McCall they can never make me hate you.

I love your writing tips so much btw!

What I’m currently struggling with is the repetition of the word « as » in my writing.

ex: « As they walked up the road, […] » or « She ate her meal as he sat down besides her » or « The water reflected the suns light as it rose »

I feel like its simply my lack of creativity in phrase structure sometimes…

Hi! So glad you've found them helpful ❤

You're right that overusing "as" can make sentences feel repetitive, but you're not lacking creativity—you're just leaning on a familiar structure. I had a similar problem with the word "before" in sentences like "she glanced at him before looking away." Here are some tips and examples that I found helpful.

Rephrase/change the structure.

instead of: as she walked up the road, the wind howled. try: she walked up the road, the howling wind whipping her hair into her face.

Use participial phrases.

instead of: she ate her meal as he sat down beside her. try: she ate her meal, barely looking up when he sat down beside her.

Break it into two sentences/parts.

instead of: the water reflected the sun’s light as it rose. try: the sun rose, its light shimmering on the water’s surface.

Use a different conjunction or preposition.

instead of: as they walked up the road, their footsteps echoed. try: their footsteps echoed while they walked up the road.

Imply simultaneity without stating it.

instead of: she ate her meal as he sat down beside her. try: he sat down beside her. she kept eating.

Whenever you catch yourself using or overusing a certain word, try to think of replacement words or rephrasings like these you could try instead. These small tweaks can help keep the flow natural while making your writing more dynamic. Hope this helped!

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Writing Rage: How To Make Your Characters Seem Angry

Anger is a powerful emotion that can add depth and intensity to your character's personality. If you're facing issues realistically expressing your characters' rage, here are some quick tips to help you get the ball rolling. Whether your character is seething with quiet rage or exploding in a fit of fury, these tips will help you convey their emotions vividly to your readers.

This is blog one in my writing different emotions series. Go check it out to explore more emotions!

Facial Expressions

Furrowed Brows: Describe the deep lines between their eyebrows, signaling frustration or intensity.

Tightened Jaw: Mention their clenched jaw, indicating suppressed anger or tension.

Narrowed Eyes: Highlight how their eyes narrow, showing suspicion, irritation, or anger.

Raised Upper Lip: Note the slight curl of the lip, suggesting disdain or contempt.

Flared Nostrils: Describe how their nostrils flare, indicating heightened emotions like anger or aggression.

Body Language and Gestures

Crossed Arms: Show their defensive stance, portraying resistance or defiance.

Pointing Finger: Describe them pointing accusatively, conveying aggression or assertion.

Fist Clenching: Mention their clenched fists, symbolizing anger or readiness for confrontation.

Hand Gestures: Detail specific hand movements like chopping motions, indicating frustration or emphasis.

Aggressive Posturing: Describe them leaning forward, invading personal space to intimidate or assert dominance.

Posture

Tense Shoulders: Highlight their raised or tense shoulders, indicating stress or readiness for conflict.

Upright Stance: Describe their rigid posture, showing control or a desire to appear strong.

Stiff Movements: Mention their jerky or abrupt movements, reflecting agitation or impatience.

Eye Contact

Intense Stares: Describe their intense or prolonged gaze, signaling confrontation or challenge.

Avoiding Eye Contact: Note how they avoid eye contact, suggesting discomfort or a desire to disengage.

Glaring: Mention how they glare at others, conveying hostility or disapproval.

Dialogue

Raised or strained tone with variations in pitch reflects heightened emotions.

Short, clipped sentences or abrupt pauses convey controlled anger.

Use of profanity or harsh language intensifies verbal expressions of anger.

Volume increase, from whispers to shouts, mirrors escalating anger levels.

Monotonous or sarcastic tone adds layers to angry dialogue.

Interruptions or talking over others signify impatience and frustration.

Aggressive verbal cues like "I can't believe..." or "How dare you..." express anger explicitly.

Reactions

Physical Reactions: Detail physical responses like increased heart rate, sweating, or trembling, showing emotional arousal.

Defensive Maneuvers: Describe how they react defensively if someone tries to touch or talk to them, such as stepping back or raising a hand to ward off contact.

Object Interaction

Aggressive Handling: Show them slamming objects, throwing things, or gripping items tightly, reflecting anger or aggression.

Use of Props: Mention how they use objects to emphasize their emotions, like slamming a door or clenching a pen.

Descriptive Words:

Verbs:

Roared with fury, expressing unbridled anger.

Snapped in frustration, indicating sudden irritation.

Shouted angrily, releasing pent-up emotions.

Glared fiercely, showing intense displeasure.

Slammed objects in rage, symbolizing anger's physical manifestation.

Grunted in annoyance, displaying impatience.

Raged vehemently, portraying uncontrolled anger.

Adjectives:

Furious and incensed, conveying intense anger.

Seething with rage, bubbling beneath the surface.

Livid and fuming, exhibiting visible anger.

Agitated and irritated, showing growing impatience.

Enraged and wrathful, expressing extreme anger.

Vexed and irate, indicating annoyance.

Infuriated and incandescent, highlighting explosive anger.

Looking For More Writing Tips And Tricks? 

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